Having a big desire of going to Cuba, and not being able to travel there yet, it is very refreshing to have things from the island. In spite of every kind of feelings that everyone can have, I still have a huge interest of knowing the places where my most treasured possessions come from.
My most treasured possessions include: a great book about the most important interview given for Fidel Castro to Ignacio Ramonet (“Cien Horas con Fidel”), a little sculpture of a dancing girl -that is made of wood-, some Cuban cigars (“Romeo y Julieta” is the accurate brand), postcards, and a tiny bottle that has inside the Cuban flag that has the face of Ernesto “Che” Guevara, with the legend “Seamos realistas, hagamos lo imposible”.
I have always loved History, and when I started reading about the Cuban Revolution I felt completely attracted. That’s why a friend of mine who currently lives in Cuba (making her medicine studies), always brings me presents and ‘souvenirs’ that of course, I treasure.
Many people used to think that the value of their possessions comes from the economical aspect, but there are others that just don’t think that way; most of the times the ‘value’ actually depends on the emotional meaning that each one give to their things.
Nowadays we are actually invaded for so many messages sent by the mass media, whose final objective is make us believing that we really need the things that they are selling to us, that we have to live our lives the way they tell us; in a nutshell, the more things we have, the better persons we are. I do not share that way of life, I think that is up to us not believing that trash, and not give them (mass media people) the power to decide which things we supposedly need in order to have a “great life”.
I think I deserve 15-17 / 20.
Hey Fabiola
ResponderEliminarGood composition, you use your personal treasures to land on the general aspects of valued objects.
hi fabiola!:
ResponderEliminarI really liked your work. I think you have a good use on language: "in a nutshell" and you write diverse structures. The only I could say is check this phrase: "In spite of every kind of feelings that everyone can have, I still have a huge interest of knowing the places where my most treasured possessions come from" and you can also check the use of "believing" in "whose final objective is make us believing "
Fabiola: I liked your composition because is well structured, your ideas are very clear and there's no confusing paragraphs or something like that! In adition, you explain why you treasured your souvenirs and you wrote what you think that happens nowadays with the mass media.
ResponderEliminarHi fabiola, Trough your well written story you remind me my beloved Cuba. I hope so you can go soon, I am sure you will never forget it. By the way, the photo in my profile was taken in Cuba (Cardenas).
ResponderEliminarHI fabiola!!
ResponderEliminarI have seen those cigars, I think you have very interesting ideas!!! and about your composition I like it, I think you caught my attention since I start reading, I like it..
Bye
Hi Fabiola
ResponderEliminarYour composition it's very interesting, you did it well, yua have good use of language, and is well organised.
Hey Fabiola
ResponderEliminarWow, Cuba. Its a really interesting country and you really describe the good things of that country, your composition has good use of lanuage and is well organized
Good for you (just remember to drink a Mojito and smoke a cigar when you go to that country)
Fabiola:
ResponderEliminarI think it was a good story, you argue about your personal treasured objects. You also give your point of view about the mass media and what happens now a day.
Hi Fabiola: I enjoy the way you talk obout Cuba, I think all the countries have something to offer, and Cuba has a lot to offer, so I like your composition and think it is well written, so good work.
ResponderEliminarHello Fabiola!!!
ResponderEliminarI think that your composition is interesting and well done, because you have a good language use, I suggest you change the organization because the introduction didn't inspire me to continue reading, maybe you can write a short description like in the penultimate paragraph.
Hi Fabiola,
ResponderEliminarI liked your composition. I think it is very good elaborated and I agree with you in the ideas you set. I liked the opening paragraph and the composition in general is very easy to follow.I think you did a very good job.
Hi Fabiola:
ResponderEliminarI liked your composition very much and I think it was interesting the way you talked about the treasures, besides I agree with some of the things that you mentioned.
Well done!!!!!!!!!!!
regards
Robert
Hello Fabiola.
ResponderEliminarYour composition is really good, it has a good use of language and it's organized.
I think it's really interesting to treasure many objects that come from the same place.
Hey Fab:
ResponderEliminarI liked your work because it was easy to follow and because your detailed description of them and their value.
Hello, I like your article, it has a good develop of the ideas, and besides that I also like History, and of course I agree with some of the revolucionary ideas, well done.
ResponderEliminarHello.
ResponderEliminarI believe that in general your essay is good, but I think that you should have begun to talk about your point of view against the media and the image that they gave us of what should be important,and you should have mentioned that point of view in your introductory paragraph.
That's all, see you.
Gabriel García
Hello! I liked so much you composition, I liked the opening paragraph.it´s elaborated, you have a great vocabulary, it is easy to follow the composition.
ResponderEliminarBere.
Hello Fabiola
ResponderEliminarYou sent a good message in an excellent way. Your use of english is good. You have a good vocabulary too. I like the way that you transmit your ideas and feelings. You are clear and concrete, but descriptive. Good composition.
Hi Fabiola!
ResponderEliminarYour composition shows well why do you value the objects yu mentioned. The text is well organized and the vocabulary is rich. Good job!
hello fabiola
ResponderEliminarI like your point of view about the treasure, it is common that many of our friends and the things that they give us represents the affect to us, it's logical only I suggest start with a more impact opening paragraph.